You have obviously been working very hard on your research Zoe and have really studies the openings in detail. You have made good use of media language and covered your analysis in detail as well as adding a lot of images to support your points. However there is a tendency to simply describe what you see without always then discussing conventions and the effect on the audience.
In order to improve you need to make sure you have applied the DISTINCT approach to your analysis and ensure that you have mentioned each of the areas.
Can you reply to this post to let me know when you have tackled these improvements. At the moment I would put your work at a level 2/3 border.
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